“It is such a secret place, the land of tears…” - Antoine de Saint-Exupéry
Poetry Jam this week has chosen the prompt of “sunsets”. Contributors who take up the challenge come up with a poem around this topic. Here is my contribution:
Antique Engraving
The sun paints the west with saffron
The sky around it mauve.
The naked trees are shuddering,
Night comes fast, dark and cold.
In front of me the city stretches
Dressed in grey and black,
While in the horizon’s depths
Bell towers echo a melancholy sadness –
A baroque sadness, violet, heavy, lonesome.
A chimney spews out smoke
Spreading shadows like endless veils
That asphyxiate me,
Aided by the bony claws
Of dead branches.
My pain, a dying bird
Has nested in my throat,
And sorrow throttles me
With hands like pincers.
In the west, the golden glow is no more
Black clouds cover the sky.
Hope flies away, chased by the ill wind,
That gallops past,
Piercing my empty soul as it leaves.
Poetry Jam this week has chosen the prompt of “sunsets”. Contributors who take up the challenge come up with a poem around this topic. Here is my contribution:
Antique Engraving
The sun paints the west with saffron
The sky around it mauve.
The naked trees are shuddering,
Night comes fast, dark and cold.
In front of me the city stretches
Dressed in grey and black,
While in the horizon’s depths
Bell towers echo a melancholy sadness –
A baroque sadness, violet, heavy, lonesome.
A chimney spews out smoke
Spreading shadows like endless veils
That asphyxiate me,
Aided by the bony claws
Of dead branches.
My pain, a dying bird
Has nested in my throat,
And sorrow throttles me
With hands like pincers.
In the west, the golden glow is no more
Black clouds cover the sky.
Hope flies away, chased by the ill wind,
That gallops past,
Piercing my empty soul as it leaves.
a baroque sadness....nice...really like the visuals and how you layered them...the chimneys...the bony claw branches....they all build nicely to set the mood in this one...
ReplyDeleteI hope soon the all sadness goes away and sun rises again.....
ReplyDeleteThis does have a heavy baroque feel to it. Sadness in contrast to the beauty. May the sun come again.
ReplyDeleteA real forlorn hope about this, love the way you blend the smoke into the words. This is quite provocative.
ReplyDeleteContemplative and beautiful, Nicholas.
ReplyDeleteA dark and poignant poem, Nicholas. I guess in keeping with Autumn and perhaps your state fo mind at the time. I hope things brighten up soon.
ReplyDeleteI think your interpretation of Alan's challenge is most unique and beautifully composed.
ReplyDeleteOh! So dark and melancholy... Perfect for an autumn sunset
ReplyDeleteIt really does portray beautifully an antique engraving sunset
ReplyDelete... positively apocalyptic ... such a dark mood you've created here ... great noir.
ReplyDelete"My pain, a dying bird / Has nested in my throat,"...the lines make the feel palpable...but the darkness has its own beauty of twinkles too meditating on a new sunrise...love the dark lines here..
ReplyDeleteSuch a sad but beautiful story, full of lessons...
ReplyDeleteDark and sombre and beautiful...
ReplyDeleteA Baroque sadness, like Albinoni's "Adagio". Wonderful poem
ReplyDeleteSome really great lines in this! Loved baroque sadness, pain like a bird nestled in my throat, from light to darkness. Quite a journey
ReplyDeleteSad but beautiful, nevertheless.
ReplyDeleteMelancholy and introspective, but beautiful
ReplyDeleteSad and beautiful...
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