Poetry Jam this week asks participants to “feel the silence, experience the emotion and write whatever you feel your heart sets you free to share”. Here is my offering:
The Ditty of April Approaching
How far from you I feel
When I am by your side.
The moon who watches me
Understands, smiles but is silent
Leaving me alone, and you!
You are so distant
Especially when I am by your side.
Too much silence
Too much darkness.
Only I, alone, and you so far away
When I need you most.
The moon so far,
Pallid, lonely and silent, like me!
Too many fears,
Too many problems.
And I so close, yet far away
I dare not speak,
I cannot risk losing you,
I cannot ask you to approach me.
It’s better that you be far
Even though only beside me.
How far away and yet so near,
So close,
So forbidden,
So silent,
So very far!
…a fear of greater loneliness if the silence is broken. Well penned!
ReplyDeletesilence builds up grain by grain this subtle barrier...wonderfully explored..
ReplyDeleteApt lines.
ReplyDeleteWe shatter & ruin the silence if we talk. If we dare to speak, then we risk to lose :)
it is a risk we have to take
ReplyDeleteif we are to know love....
i say go for, break the silence dare to win
ReplyDeletehave a good Wednesday
much love...
I think the most difficult silence is the silence of two people together with things unsaid standing between them. Your poem really expressed the difficulty and tension of this well, Nick.
ReplyDeleteFear and love can be sometimes different sides of the same coin. This oozes with tension.
ReplyDeleteYou'll never taste love if you don't take a chance. Well done.
ReplyDeleteWell, that sort of limits the enjoyment of love! I would hope that this as a temporary situation that people would find themselves in. That just cannot last that way. Too much stress!
ReplyDeleteThis is very sad but I think it conveys a situation and feelings very well. Lots of tension in this.
ReplyDeleteooohhh depressing!!!!! :/
ReplyDeleteNicholas,
ReplyDeleteI love this for the sense of separation, the longing and the obvious silence; all bound together. Silence must be respected, if even a small hint of hope, can stay alive. Great expression...
Eileen
ah the feeling of wanting to say but at the same time to respect the silence..it's difficult..very nicely expressed
ReplyDeleteI love the winsomeness expressed here. Beautifull penned.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written! I enjoyed the irony between the title and the content --- one expects something quite different in a ditty.
ReplyDeleteA forlorn moment captured beautifully... Life is beautiful though, isn't it...
ReplyDeleteTrue love holds so much pain with all of the beauty as well. This captures that truth beautifully Nicholas!
ReplyDeletejust beautiful with so much meaning
ReplyDeleteHow beautifully you have penned down , which speaks out the truth! :)
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