“The way I see
it, if you want the rainbow, you gotta put up with the rain.” - Dolly Parton
Poetry Jam this week has as its theme the topic of “hands” with the instruction:
“Let your hands inspire you to write something
POSITIVE. Absolutely no violence allowed. Then go out and use your hands to
lift others up through comments on their blogs!”
Here is my
contribution:
The Rendezvous
The rain fell
all night long,
And gray dawn
was wet
Making of the
streets, steel mirrors,
And of the
gutters, rivulets.
As raindrops
fell and fell
I feared you
wouldn’t come;
As clock hands
crawled
And dark eddies
swirled in my mind.
The street
deserted, all taking cover,
Even the cars
sparse, on the road;
I watch and
wait, mindful of the rain
Saturating me to
the core.
As raindrops
fall and fall
I fear you will
not come;
As clock hands
stop
And frozen rain
covers my heart.
A lone umbrella
in the distance,
Approaching, and
a familiar footstep
Making me watch
alert,
The dawning sun
of expectation
Lighting my
darkness.
As raindrops
vanish in mid-fall,
I clasp you to
my breast and we kiss;
Our hands
intertwined,
The umbrella now
redundant,
As our love
shields us from all outside.
WOW...what a picture perfect lines....made me nostalgic!
ReplyDeleteRain and beloved ....you cant ask for more!
have a good Wednesday; your poem sings a happy tune of waiting. nice romantic mood
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Gorgeous poem, Nicholas! I love the way you have painted the scene with the disappointment of the first few stanzas changing to ecstasy as the lover arrives. I also liked the reference to the hands of the clock grinding to a halt as time slows when the lover is not there and then the hands of the two lovers intertwining...
ReplyDeletesmiles....very nice...love the anx of anticipation i feel...hoping she comes and the relief when she finally does....great descriptions, like of the streets there in the beginning...
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the scene you have set, the expectation, and then the kiss and hands entwined! Nicely penned, Nick.
ReplyDeletepowerfully written i can taste the expectation and the relief.
ReplyDeleteHow sweet and romantic ~ Glad that the rendezvous turned out to be a good one ~
ReplyDeleteLovely painting of a moment of expectation, doubt and reward!
ReplyDeleteSweet moment and anticipation of date.....so romantic...ah x
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written, lovely thoughts in the contrasting halves.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous poem! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteOh, so beautiful, Nicholas.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you built your poem, Nick, and how romantic it is.
ReplyDeleteNicholas,
ReplyDeleteA true Parisian scene, painted with the colours of emotion and weather, noted in your poem...Loved the hands of the clock, tempting the waiting and the longing...
Eileen
Beautiful indeed! Loved the situation you have created with the weather and the emotions.
ReplyDeleteEmotions captured in lines are beautiful, and wait shall be fruitful.
ReplyDeleteAh, and they are left singing in the rain! Loved the repeat with changes in tense.
ReplyDeleteSoooo nice. I do know about not feeling the rain
ReplyDeleteah..the rain and waiting always goes well...it in itself is like a ;ove story..
ReplyDeleteso very romantic ... and it captures perfectly the anticipation of a lover waiting ... waiting.
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